Personal Ad Makeover: “Fox” (DURING)

Fox’s current profile has some great information, but it’s a little scatterbrained in places.   He’s surprisingly free of red flags – congrats on that, Fox!   You’re one of the few.

The sad side?  There’s a laundry list of interests, including some slashlists!  What’s a slashlist?  It’s a laundry list with slashes instead of commas!

Let’s see where Fox stands at the moment:

Headline: Jack Seeking Sally

CheeseFactor Maximum!  I’ll bet you I can find thirty-five other thirty-somethings using this same exact title (or another famous fictional couple).  Cheesy and overused.

Don’t know if anyone is any good at writing these as they’re usually more than what’s written here.

If I had a nickel for every profile that references itself, I wouldn’t need to go to my day job anymore.   Add to the fact that this sentence doesn’t make much sense…

Anyway here’s more on me: humorous, tattooed artist with a love of a variety of art/ghost stories/horror genre fiction/history/cooking, Hockey, punk/grunge/rock music, movies, video games, pool & more.

The SLASHLIST!  I’m not sure what the purpose of the slashlist is, but it seems to be a way of having a fill-in-the-blank profile?  She can pick one of the following options – it’s a Choose Your Own Adventure of Dating!

And yes the headline is using character names from a very good movie & not my actual name.

…and here I was thinking I should only write you if I’m named Sally…

You: (some or all should apply) Funny, true to herself, share some common interests but not all, forthright sometimes, beautiful hair, addictive laugh, inquisitive eyes, open minded, laid back at times, emotionally courageous & an open heart.

Now there’s a laundry list for the girl.  Check off the ones that apply to you, ladies!  How many is “some”?  If only a few apply to me, is that “some”?  What if I share all of his interests?  Should I not write?  How often should one be forthright? Is there a difference between an addictive laugh and an annoying laugh?  So many questions and zero answers!

for fun:

Fun for me involves trying new/good food, films & film festivals, comedy clubs, rock concerts, pool halls, carnivals, museums, hockey games, video games & really just doing anything fun.

Laundry list!  Yawn!  These need to be integrated into the main profile and left out of the sidebars.

my job:

Graphic designer/photographer for retail supplier in the DFW area.

my ethnicity:

Typical American mixed background involving family from Sweeden/Denmark & the British Isles (UK & Scot). Taking after my dad’s side (the British/Scottish side) more than anything.


my education:

In school part time now for 2nd degree in Game Art & Design.

Why?  Not satisfied with your current job?  Looking for something new?  Doing it on the side for fun?

favorite hot spots:

Currently there’s Deep Ellum, the DMA, West End, lower greenville, Palace of Wax, the FW Zoo and much more. Outside of DFW there’s my adopted homeland of Louisiana/New Orleans. Wanting to get to see more of Scotland/UK.

“and much more” leaves so much to be desired…

favorite things:

Listening to the greats in rockabilly/grunge music, strolling through summer storms & autumn leaves, traveling, watching a select few shows on the tv, lots of movies & so much more.

…and so much more!  Order the box set today to get it all!

last read:

Plenty of Edgar Allan Poe & H.P. Lovecraft, Wierd New England, Haunting of Louisiana, & all the other fiction, nonfiction books are still being worked on. I read quite a bit so I’m not going to update this silly thing every time.

As far as the “last read” section, I have a philosophy – if you can’t be bothered to update it every time you move into a new set of books, then make reference to how many books you devour in an average month and move on.

Stay tuned for Fox’s spankin’ new profile… coming soon!  Want to win a profile makeover in this month’s contest?  Click here to enter!

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Since 2008, E. Foley of Geek’s Dream Girl has been helping geeks from around the world find love. She writes amazing online dating profiles for her fellow geeks and guides them through the perilous waters of the dating scene and out the other side. She's totally proud to report that she's even caused a couple geek weddings! She lives in Maryland with DaveTheGame, her adorable cats, Mr. Peanut & Don Juan, and Titania, Queen of the Cocker Spaniels. (Email e, or follow @geeksdreamgirl on Twitter.)

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